WALT: Inform
The ones that I have done out of this will be bold
- use a range of verbs (evaporate, melt, etc.)
- use a variety of specific vocabulary (matter, solid, liquid, gas)
- add significant detail to describe each part (examples, diagram, giff)
- vary sentence starters
- organise my ideas into at least 5 paragraphs
DRAFT
Finished writing
Yesterday we were learning about the newtons cradle.
The newtons cartel is basically has some meatle
balls. It has energy running back and forward coursing the balls
To go balls to go as well.
What did I see? I saw an amazing human invention. It must of took
some hard study to make it.
It was incredible how much energy was in it.
It is amazing how the kinetic and patentiolenergy traveled through the mettle balls
and made it continue to bounce back and
Forward when
mettle is not even bouncy.
I wonder what would happen if we took away ball, I
think that it would still go but
It would not go as good because there is
less potential energy
What I thought. I wish that I had one of
them in my room.
Self assessment: I think I did a good at making a short snappy storie but next time I think that I should make it about 1 more paragraph longer otherwise I would give myself about a 7 1/2 out 10.
Peer assessment:Nice work Callum I really like the way you made your self assessment real maybe make it longer next time
Thanks Callum, a good piece of writing about Newton's Cradle. I like the way you have put sentences like "I wonder" in. Next time we need to think carefully about how to "inform" your audience - if we are informing someone we are not telling them that "yesterday we did an experiment". We use language like "Did you know..." "Have you ever thought about..."
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